* I really only spent 10 minutes plus 5 to correct some glaring mistakes on this*
The two freshman girls stagger out of the frat house arm in arm. They are giggling profusely.
“They are so nice” Viv exclaims.
“Yeah but you know what they want.” Suzy giggles.
“Well not Steve” Viv says putting her hands on her hips.
“Yeah, I know” Suzy says rolling her eyes.
They are making slow progress on the very short walk to the dorms. It is obvious to most that they have had enough to drink to make them extra giggly and reduce their inhibitions.
They stop hanging on to each other as much for warmth in the cold late night fall air as much for the wobbliness that the cranberry juice and southern comfort has made their legs.
“Are you going back to John’s room or your room, Suzy” asks Viv
“Well I’ll check on him and then I should go to bed. But not if the light is off. I can’t see from here.” She replies
Well lets go that way
They take three steps forward and see something in their path pause. Almost simultaneously the stop, their neck snapping to look at each other.
“LEAF PILE!” they yell.
Grasping hands they run towards it and in an ungraceful slipping sliding falling motion land flat on their back in the pile.
“Leaf Angel!” yell Viv.They scissor their arms and legs like children do to make angel figures in the snow.
They loose the motion as they erupting in to raucous laughter half buried in the pile of leaves.
“This is going to hurt in the morning Suzy”
“Yeah but I would never do this in Cali Viv too many snakes”
Viv leaps up Pulling Suzy after her. LAughing they walk towards the Dorms.
Saturday, October 24, 2009
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10 minutes or longer, I thought this was a great piece. It had good flow, was entertaining, and made me want to be one of the girls. Great job Vicki! I like this one a lot.
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