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Charlotte twirled her parasol in anticipation. She looked forward to the time of relaxing and talking.
Men were walking swiftly toward their homes, that surrounded the park, for thir noon meals. It was this part of city life that was so pleasant to Charlotte. She did not miss the country life she had grown up in so far away from her father’s work seeing him seldom. She wished for her children to know their father, this was the only time she missed her husband.
“Ahh here we go” Samuel exclaimed bring Charlotte back to the delicious present.
“You were lost in thought there Charlotte, I would love to know what you were thinking about on this fine day.”
“I was considering all I saw here in the park and in the end I came to miss my husband.” Charlotte replied.
“Ah, David was a good man. He is missed” Samuel replied flatly. “I am sure he was a good husband and would have been a good father”
When she got this sentence from others she would nod and bow her head. She found her self instead looking at the top of Samuel’s head as he had it bowed with laughter building in her throat. It released in an explosion of giggles. Samuel looked up with such an expression of confusion that she could only laugh harder. The tightness of her corset got her to gasping for air rather quickly. Samuel’s confusion turned to concern and he quickly extracted a bottle of liquid from the satchel and a cup. He poured a full cup and as she was shaken he held it to her lips for her to drink. She grasped the cup and took a deep drink. The liquid was sweet and warmed her throat.

I didn't see this leading to drunken sex ;) Just kidding. With you anything is possible.
ReplyDeleteReally... its good. I'm glad you were able to get them to the park. There are some grammatical errors and typos that made parts of it really hard to read. For example, the first quote in the second paragraph. I'm still not sure what you were trying to say.
I'm interested to get to the scene that was in your head. Is it still there?
I made a few corrections. I have to write a conversation and then make London do what it does and then to the scene that was written by Samuel as It is not the scene that was in my head. Darn that chivalrous man!
ReplyDeleteI don't know if I can ever get to that scene.... I want to. May be I will just have to write it with out a story around it....
I've done that many, many times. A scene is my entry for the day.
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